在多媒體學習中，每單元都會有寫作的練習

不是要寫那種長篇作文

就是短短的一小篇

 

寫完交卷後

會有老師幫你訂正和評分

我覺得評分到不是重點

而是把重心放在「訂正」

這樣才會了解到自已疏忽的點

或是還可以進步的點

 

 

我寫了三篇

老師改的時間也挺快速

我第一篇是中午交卷

當天下午2點多就收到email的回覆

 

 

其實我寫一篇時

頭腦空空，蠻卡的

也不知道該怎麼寫

但大家不用擔心

因為一旁會有可以參考的範例

可以先看一下

然後再試著看看能否寫出自已的版本

 

 

如下是我第一篇交卷的寫作，以及老師修改回來的評語，供大家參考!

 

單元一 寫作

(網路版)

I am optimistic about the future.   Even though the polution situation is still serious, it can recall our humans to protect our enviroment. 

For example, due to the bad air quality in Taiwan, a lot of pepole start to care where the root cause is and try to find out if any solution can reduce the air polution. 

One of the obvious things to reduce the air polution is that more people to ride the electric motor bycle.  Also, the government gives the incentive to encourage us to buy the electric motor bycle. 

 

I believe there are more people increase the awareness of protecting enviroment.  The polution will reduce steadily.  Our enviroment can be better.

 

Topic

Write a paragraph about the future. What do you believe will happen in the future? Are you optimistic or pessimistic?

Grade

90

Comments

Agreement: Kindly note that, in simple present tense, if the subject is the third person singular, the verb form should be 'verb+ 's' or 'es'. Hence I have changed', e.g.,"Also, the government gives the incentive to encourage us to buy the electric motor cycle.".

 

Article: Kindly note that, the definite article 'the' is used to point out some particular person or thing, or one already referred to, e.g.,"One of the obvious things to reduce the air pollution is that more people to ride the electric motor cycle.".
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